By Meelnur
 

Overall, the original was simply in need of a lot more attention, and i think it came out as a much better experience for it.

By Meelnur
 

Tweaked the creatures to make the the world feel more alive. And I fixed the abysmal canyon walking simulator section to make far less dull.

By Meelnur
 

Bit of a long overdue second pass over the honestly rather weak chapter 2. Touched up the writing (spelling was hard).